{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"62622936","dateCreated":"1369753966","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"achawla","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/achawla","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bjhcivilizations.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/62622936"},"dateDigested":1532766599,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Billy and Andrew","description":"I don't think there was enough information. It was short.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"62622910","dateCreated":"1369753887","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"achawla","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/achawla","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bjhcivilizations.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/62622910"},"dateDigested":1532766599,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Jaclyn and Annika","description":"The essay was very repetitive. The word "government" was used too much, which makes it more boring to read because we know that your topic is on GOVERNMENT and leadership. I did like the higher vocabulary, though.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"63168308","body":"thanks i will improve that","dateCreated":"1369753921","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"jawittrock","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jawittrock","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"63188002","body":"Thanks, I'll try to replace some of that.","dateCreated":"1369799935","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"asial02","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/asial02","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"62622882","dateCreated":"1369753834","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"2015004","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/2015004","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bjhcivilizations.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/62622882"},"dateDigested":1532766600,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Jaclyn and Annika ","description":"This is a very good rough draft. You may need some pictures to support your information. I liked how you had a whole intro paragraph. A couple grammar errors. VERY WELL DONE!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"63168324","body":"Thankyou","dateCreated":"1369753948","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"jawittrock","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jawittrock","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"63187996","body":"Thank you, that helps a lot.","dateCreated":"1369799908","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"asial02","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/asial02","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"62622828","dateCreated":"1369753647","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"kbyrne22","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kbyrne22","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bjhcivilizations.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/62622828"},"dateDigested":1532766600,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Jaclyn and Annika","description":"Your rough draft was very well written. I liked the use of higher vocabulary. You said the word "government" a lot and I think that it was making your essay less interesting because of the repetition. You said "government" twice or 3 times in a few sentences as well. Overall great job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"63168354","body":"thanks i will take out some of that !","dateCreated":"1369753997","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"jawittrock","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jawittrock","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"63187992","body":"Thanks, I will take that into consideration.","dateCreated":"1369799887","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"asial02","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/asial02","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"62622134","dateCreated":"1369751449","smartDate":"May 28, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"daniel734","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/daniel734","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bjhcivilizations.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/62622134"},"dateDigested":1532766600,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Shayaan and Thea","description":"You guys did a good job overall. You should include a conclusion paragraph because you guys made a introduction, so it wouldn't be in proportion if you don't add a conclusion. Overall, you guys did a wonderful job.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"62611944","dateCreated":"1369694468","smartDate":"May 27, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"Khaff","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Khaff","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bjhcivilizations.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/62611944"},"dateDigested":1532766600,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Amelia and Christina","description":"I think that you have a lot of great information, but it is arranged in a very choppy manner. At times reading your essay was confusing because you had random facts at random places. I also think that you need more of an intriguing introduction and a stronger conclusion. I really liked your word choice and points. Great Job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"62574682","dateCreated":"1369406904","smartDate":"May 24, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"jawittrock","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jawittrock","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bjhcivilizations.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/62574682"},"dateDigested":1532766601,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Billy Buress and Andrew Dormal ","description":"You did great you had great info but the    only thing is that it was short, but the information was great","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"62574612","dateCreated":"1369406642","smartDate":"May 24, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"asial02","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/asial02","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bjhcivilizations.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/62574612"},"dateDigested":1532766601,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Shayaan and Thea","description":"Your paragraph was good, however you should have proofread it for spelling\/grammar errors, f.e. "posterity's". Also, you said that Rome and Mesopotamia were both influenced by other cultures, however, you didn't go into much detail about HOW they were influenced. You could have written about  what cultures influenced them, and what part of that culture that they "borrowed".","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"62574572","dateCreated":"1369406478","smartDate":"May 24, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"Ashiraz1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Ashiraz1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bjhcivilizations.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/62574572"},"dateDigested":1532766601,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Billy and Andrew","description":"Good job in being specific with the similarities. Gave background information on the civilizations rather than just listing the similarity or difference. You need more information about maybe the origin of the government (how it started). Don't use words like one way or another way. First explain the government, and link that back to the other civilizations about the similarities and differences. The definition of Tyranny is not correct. Tyranny is not an act but it was actually a form of government in which a king takes power in a harsh and illegal way. After that, you should include that many people overthrew the tyrants. In one of the sentences, you said some kingdoms were nice. I like the word usage of kingdom but nice isn't a descriptive word. Include a word like leniant or easygoing. You also need more details.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"62574564","dateCreated":"1369406449","smartDate":"May 24, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"IshaSingh23","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/IshaSingh23","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/bjhcivilizations.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/62574564"},"dateDigested":1532766601,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Shayaan and Thea","description":"I like that you had an introduction paragraph. It was written well and had a good main idea that explained what the paragraph would be about. The body paragraph was good. However, when you think of dynasties, you think of China. Well at least I do. If you could clarify that just a little more, that would be great. The conclusion sentence is ok. Try to mention what the similarities do like the way you said what the differences do. It will help the paragraph be wrapped up better. Overall, great job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}